TECHNICAL ENGLISH II
Dear all
Welcome to the first e-learning session. I´m sure you´ve made yourself familiar with the content in Teams and have read the respective pages on our website (Innovation Project, Grammar and Language Focus) and have also found a partner / topic for your innovation project.
For E-Learning Task 1.1, you can complete grammar exercises online (https://b.socrative.com/login/student/ room name: TKITVWRP). The grammar exercises are worth 10 participation points.
If you want to practise your persuasion skills, please go to Session 1 – Language Focus on our website, scroll down and use one of the language techniques to sell an innovative product to potential dragons. Write 1-2 sentences. You can earn 5 points for every persuasive entry (please also say which technique you´ve used). This is e-learning task 1.2. You can post e-learning task 1.2 here or in your MS Teams Channel.
If you have any questions, please let me know.
Have a good day!
Kind regards
Dagmar
Kommentar schreiben
Dominique Peißl (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 12:06)
Hey Dagmar,
Here are two sentences for task 1.2:
Rhetorical question:
Do you really want to miss this unique opportunity to invest in our product?
Anecdote:
I remember when I read my first book. It was a lot more tiring than when my mother read it to me. What if you could have a device that would read it back to you?
Kind regards,
Dominique
Tatjana Jovanovic (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 12:21)
Inclusive language
1. We have all been in difficult emotional situations at one point in our lives. With InstaHelp we provide psychological help via the internet, fast and uncomplicated.
Anecdote
1. Have you ever been in the situation where you are waiting out in the rain for the next bus, but it just won’t come? With Uber this will never again happen to you!
Nadine Postl (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 13:23)
When I think about pizza, I want to eat a Margheritha immediately. Now I can have a Margheritha at home with the mini PizzaOven. It really help me to cook a perfect pizza! (Anectode)
Haven´t we all children, who throw their plates on the floor while eating? A silicon place mat is the solution. It sticks to a table very well, easy to clean and harder for our kids to throw! (Inclusive language)
Dagmar for Dominique P. (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 16:10)
Here are two sentences for task 1.2:
Rhetorical question:
Do you really want to miss this unique opportunity to invest in our product? YES, I LIKE IT HOW YOU´VE USED THE WORDS "REALLY" AND "UNIQUE" TO STRESS YOUR SENTENCE.
Anecdote:
I remember when I read my first book. It was a lot more tiring than when my mother read it to me. What if you could have a device that would read it back to you? GOOD!
WELL DONE!
Dagmar for Tatjana J. (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 16:13)
Inclusive language
1. We have all been in difficult emotional situations at one point in our lives. With InstaHelp we provide psychological help via the internet, fast and uncomplicated. VERY NICE! IT WOULD PROBABLY BE A BIT MORE NATURAL TO SAY SOMETHING LIKE "STRAIGHTFORWARD" OR "QUICK AND EASY" INSTEAD OF "UNCOMPLICATED" ...
Anecdote
1. Have you ever been in the situation where you are waiting out in the rain for the next bus, but it just won’t come? With Uber this will never again happen to you! THIS IS MORE OF A RHETORICAL QUESTION ... IF YOU WANT TO TURN IT INTO AN ANECDOTE, TELL YOUR AUDIENCE ABOUT YOUR OWN EXPERIENCES ...
GOOD!
Dagmar for Nadine P. (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 16:20)
When I think about pizza, I want to eat a Margherit(h)a immediately. Now I can have a Margherit(h)a at home with the mini PizzaOven. It really help me to cook a perfect pizza! (Anectode) YOU`RE MIXING THINGS UP A BIT, I THINK ... I THINK TO TURN THIS INTO AN ANECDOTE, YOU HAVE TO USE THE PAST TENSE. SOME TIME AGO, WHENEVER I THOUGHT ABOUT PIZZA I ALWAYS HAD TO LEAVE THE HOUSE TO GO TO THE LOCAL RESTAURANT TO GET ONE. OR WAIT FOR HOURS FOR A PIZZA MARGHERITA TO BE DELIVERED. BUT THIS HAS CHANGED! THE MINI PIZZAOVEN HELPS ME ... WITHIN SECONDS ... IT´S STILL NOT PERFECT, BUT CAN YOU SEE THE DIFFERENCE?
Haven´t (DON´T WE ALL HAVE) we all children, who throw their plates on the floor while eating? A silicon place mat is the solution. It sticks to a table very well, IS easy to clean and harder for our kids to throw! (Inclusive language) WELL DONE!
Philip Fraß (Dienstag, 17 März 2020 17:17)
Hi Dagmar,
1) 125 million people worldwide suffer physically and mentally from psoriasis - we have the solution. (evidence)
2) Doesn't everyone want to have the perfect desk? We are presenting you the ideal office desk. (rhetorical question)
Greetings,
Philip
Dagmar for Philip F. (Mittwoch, 18 März 2020)
Well done!
Christian Neuwirth (Mittwoch, 18 März 2020 19:53)
Hi Dagmar,
(Evidence)
The sales statistics prove that our product is leading on the market.
(Emotive language)
Our motivation is to improve the well-being of the human race.
Greetings,
Christian
Peter Jantschgi (Donnerstag, 19 März 2020 17:46)
Did you know that cats spend 66% of their life asleep (evidence)
Have you ever thoght that you can learn to be creative? We have the appropriate creativity techniques for you! (rhetorical question)
Dominik Tamm (Donnerstag, 19 März 2020 18:17)
1.) Statistics show that almost 80.000 accidents involving deer occur in austria every year.
Measures should be taken to minimise the number of accidents. (evidence)
2.) Don't we all dream of a more stress-free life?
With our robot you can make your everyday life more stress-free, because it does the
cleaning for you. (inclusive language)
Regina Schnalzer (Donnerstag, 19 März 2020 20:24)
Hi Dagmar,
Anecdote: In summer, when garbage cans with organic waste increasingly attract flies' attention, you’re most likely to run into maggots. The bad news is that high temperatures and humidity create the perfect conditions for maggots, but the good news is our product "BioButler" is going to solve this problem.
Evidence: Waste disposal is becoming increasingly expensive and challenging. Currently, organic food scraps and garden waste make up 20-30 % of what we throw away. That's a lot, isn’t it?
Cheers, Regina
Markus Halbwirth (Donnerstag, 19 März 2020 21:17)
(Anecdote)
When I think of all the plastic waste in the oceans, our innovative solution is urgently needed.
(Evidence)
According to latest studies, by 2050 there will be more plastic waste than fish in the oceans. That's really shocking, isn't it?
Kind regards, Markus
Dagmar for Christian N. (Freitag, 20 März 2020 10:19)
HI CHRISTiAN, HERE ARE MY COMMENTS:
(Evidence)
The sales statistics prove that our product is leading on the market. I THINK YOU COULD MAKE THIS EVEN STRONGER - BY ADDING ANOTHER SENTENCE OR USING STRONGER LANGUAGE ...
(Emotive language)
Our motivation is to improve the well-being of the human race. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, THIS IS NOT VERY EMOTIONAL - HOW COULD YOU IMPROVE THIS SENTENCE TO CREATE MORE IMPACT?
KIND REGARDS
DAGMAR
Dagmar for Peter J. (Freitag, 20 März 2020 10:26)
Did you know that cats spend 66% of their life asleep (evidence) AND WHERE´S THE LINK TO YOUR PRODUCT?
Have you ever thoUght => CONSIDERED / THOUGHT ABOUT THE POSSIBILITY OF LEARNING that you can learn to be creative? We have the appropriate creativity techniques for you! (rhetorical question) BETTER THAN NUMBER ONE :-)
Dagmar for Dominik T. (Freitag, 20 März 2020 10:28)
1.) Statistics show that almost 80,000 accidents involving deer occur in Austria every year.
Measures should be taken to minimise the number of accidents. (evidence) GOOD START. AND WHERE DOES YOUR PRODUCT COME IN?
2.) Don't we all dream of a more stress-free life? YES, YES, YES!
With our robot you can make your everyday life more stress-free, because it does the
cleaning for you. (inclusive language) GOOD!
Dagmar for Regina S. (Freitag, 20 März 2020 10:31)
Hi Dagmar,
Anecdote: In summer, when garbage cans with organic waste increasingly attract (THE) flies' attention, you’re most likely to run into maggots. The bad news is that high temperatures and humidity create the perfect conditions for maggots, but the good news is THAT our product "BioButler" is going to solve this problem. GOOD, ALTHOUGH WHEN TELLING ANECDOTES, YOU USUALLY INFORM YOUR AUDIENCE ABOUT AN EXPERIENCE YOUR PERSONALLY HAD IN THE PAST: LAST SUMMER THERE WERE A LOT OF MAGGOTS IN MY GARBAGE CAN (AND THEN YOU CAN DESCRIBE HOW AWFUL THIS WAS FOR YOU).
Evidence: Waste disposal is becoming increasingly expensive and challenging. Currently, organic food scraps and garden waste make up 20-30 % of what we throw away. That's a lot, isn’t it? VERY NICE - AND THEN OF COURSE; WE NEED THE LINK TO YOUR PRODUCT ...
KIND REGARDS
DAGMAR
Dagmar for Markus H. (Freitag, 20 März 2020 10:34)
(Anecdote)
When I think of all the plastic waste in the oceans, our innovative solution is urgently needed. THAT´S A BIT VAGUE AND NOT REALLY AN ANECDOTE. AN ANECDOTE WOULD BE: I WENT TO THE MALDIVES LAST SUMMER AND WHEN I WAS SWIMMING IN THE SEA, SUDDENLY SOMETHING TOUCHED MY FOOT. I LOOKED BACK AND A RING OF PLASTIC WAS WRAPPED AROUND MY ANKLE ... (SOMETHING LIKE THIS, YOU CAN EVEN USE THE ANECDOTE TECHNIQUE TO CREATE SOME TENSION :-))
(Evidence)
According to latest studies, by 2050 there will be more plastic waste than fish in the oceans. That's really shocking, isn't it? IT IS! AND THEN OF COURSE WE NEED A LINK TO YOUR PRODUCT!
Kind regards, Markus
Christoph Zemanek (Freitag, 20 März 2020 16:40)
Hi Dagmar,
Anecdote:
I remember when I registered for the study and thought that 3 years would be a long time, but now we are almost at the end.
Inclusive Language:
Haven't we all cheated once on an exam to pass?
Evidence:
I recently read on Statistik Austria that 8% of companies in the manufacturing sector use 3D printing.
Kind Regards
Christoph
Julia Daum (Freitag, 20 März 2020 21:58)
Repetition:
As we all know staying healthy is a very hard and exhausting job.
You need to eat healthy, sleep healthy and make sports to stay healty.
"Wealthy-healthy-companie's" health-pills help you to stay healthy.
Just take three health-pills a day and you will stay:
healthy,
healthy,
healthy - in any case.
Julia Daum (Freitag, 20 März 2020 22:16)
Generalisations:
As we all know cleaning our homes is not the most pleasant thing.
We all would prefer beeing at the sea, enjoying a cocktail and don't bother about dirty dishes and the household at all.
That's why we all would like to be supported by "Cleany-Winny", the most faithful cleaning-robot....
Julia Daum (Freitag, 20 März 2020 22:36)
Exaggeration:
Today we need to talk about a very serious issue.
Have you ever had been able to receive an appointment with your oculist in less than 3 months? No?
Well, me not either!!!
WHAT THE HELL ARE THEY DOING ALL DAY LONG, SO THAT
'the earliest appointment they can offer is in 2050'???
...That's why we thought about how we can accelerate the process of oculists treatment routine. We came up with the idea of an special app, to give the doctors all the necessary information in advance and don't loose time anymore...
Julia Daum (Freitag, 20 März 2020 22:53)
Rhetorical questions:
As we all know we need to cut down on social contacts due to the Corona Crisis now. The world changed due to a minimal size virus in very short time and we have found out that humans are more vulnerable as we thought we might be.
So what would happen to mankind, if nature strikes back and there would be a huge meteor strikes our pretty little world?
Would you know what to do?
We thought about the most likeliest catastrophes of our days and invented the most effective energy ring for all kind of catastrophes. You just need to put it around your house, and you will survive any catastrophe. As you might know viennas hospital disposes of one energy ring of our competitors, but that expensive ring is not even able to defend us from Corona.
So we would strongly recommend to install our new enery ring to safe the world....
Andreas Blattl (Samstag, 21 März 2020 17:11)
1) Statistics show that 85 percent of all new products fial in the market (Evidence)
2) When we talk about the effects of the corona virus, we all sit in the same boat. (inclusive language)
3) Repetition is importaint, because repetition makes you remeber it easier
best wishes
Andreas
Sandro Wallner (Sonntag, 22 März 2020 21:16)
REPETITION:
Let me tell you a story about my friend John.
John wants to buy a new laptop. He has saved enough money to buy a brand new one. But which laptop?
He is asking his tech-buddies to collect different opinions and to learn from their knowledge. He is watching YouTube reviews and he also visits many stores and compares the prices. He is spending a lot of time and energy. Time flies. But what is the result?
NOTHING, absolutely NOTHING. Now he is totally confused and frustrated. And that SUCKS, that REALLY, REALLY SUCKS.
Sandro Wallner (Sonntag, 22 März 2020 21:20)
Continuation of commentary 25:
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NOTHING, absolutely NOTHING. Now he is totally confused and frustrated. And that SUCKS, that REALLY, REALLY SUCKS.
Now John needs someone to hold his hand and guide him to the right product.
He needs a solution which combines everything in one place: the data, the advice and the store.
He needs TeccBot!
Dagmar for Christoph Z, (Montag, 23 März 2020 16:54)
Anecdote:
I remember when I registered for the study (MY STUDIES) and thought that 3 years would be a long time, but now we are almost at the end. OKAY, BUT WHAT´S THE INNOVATIVE PRODUCT YOU WANT TO PRESENT?
Inclusive Language:
Haven't we all cheated once on => IN an exam to pass? NEVER, EVER :-) LANGUAGE: I WOULD SAY CHEAT IN AN EXAM AND CHEAT ON SOMEBODY (OR THE SYSTEM). CONTENT: SEE ABOVE; SOMETHING´S MISSING ...
Evidence:
I recently read on Statistik Austria that 8% of companies in the manufacturing sector use 3D printing. OKAY, BUT SEE ABOVE ...
KIND REGARDS
DAGMAR
Dagmar for Julia D. (Montag, 23 März 2020 17:06)
Repetition:
As we all know staying healthy is a very hard and exhausting job.
You need to eat healthy, sleep healthy and make sports to stay healtHy.
"Wealthy-healthy-companY's" health-pills help you to stay healthy.
Just take three health-pills a day and you will stay:
healthy,
healthy,
healthy - in any case. VERY NICE!
Generalisations:
As we all know cleaning our homes is not the most pleasant thing.
We all would prefer be(e)ing at the sea, enjoying a cocktail and (don't) NOT bother ING about dirty dishes and the household at all.
That's why we all would like to be supported by "Cleany-Winny", the most faithful cleaning-robot.... GOOD!
Exaggeration:
Today we need to talk about a very serious issue.
Have you ever had been able to receive an appointment with your oculist in less than 3 months? No?
Well, me not either!!! => ME NEITHER
WHAT THE HELL ARE THEY DOING ALL DAY LONG, SO THAT
'the earliest appointment they can offer is in 2050'???
...That's why we thought about how we can accelerate the process of oculists´ treatment routine. We came up with the idea of a(n) special app(,) to give the doctors all the necessary information in advance and (don't) NOT TO l(o)ose time anymore... I WOULD PREFER: A SPECIAL APP THAT GIVES ... SO THE PATIENTS´ TIME WILL BE WASTED ANY MORE... (THE "TO" CONSTRUCTION IS A BIT PROBLEMATIC IN THIS CASE).
Rhetorical questions:
As we all know we need to cut down on social contacts due to the Corona Crisis now. The world HAS changed due to a minimal size virus in A very short time and we have found out that humans are more vulnerable as => THAN we thought we might be.
So what would happen to mankind, if nature strikes => STROKE back and there would be => WAS a huge meteor strikes => HITTING / STRIKING our pretty little world?
Would you know what to do?
We thought about the most likeliest => LIKELY catastrophes of our days and invented the most effective energy ring for all kind of catastrophes. You just need to put it around your house, and you will survive any catastrophe. As you might know Vienna´s hospital disposes of one energy ring of our competitors, but that expensive ring is not even able to defend us from Corona.
So we would strongly recommend to install => INSTALLING our new enery ring to saVe the world....
EXCELLENT! YOU´VE UNDERSTOOD THE TASK AND HAVE HANDED IN INTERESTING, WELL-WRITTEN UND MEANINGFUL EXAMPLES. I´VE JUST ADDED A FEW LANGUAGE COMMENTS HERE AND THERE BUT ALL IN ALL THIS IS REMARKABLY WELL DONE!
Dagmar for Andreas B. (Montag, 23 März 2020 17:10)
Andreas Blattl (Saturday, 21 March 2020 17:11)
1) Statistics show that 85 percent of all new products fial => FAILin the market (Evidence)
2) When we talk about the effects of the corona virus, we all sit => ARE ALL SITTING in the same boat. (inclusive language)
3) Repetition is importa(i)nt, because repetition makes you remeber it (WHAT?) easier
OKAY BUT WHERE´S THE LINK TO YOUR INNOVATION???
Dagmar for Sandro W. (Montag, 23 März 2020 17:14)
REPETITION:
Let me tell you a story about my friend John.
John wants to buy a new laptop. He has saved enough money to buy a brand new one. But which laptop?
He is asking his tech-buddies to collect different opinions and to learn from their knowledge. He is watching YouTube reviews and he also visits many stores and compares the prices. He is spending a lot of time and energy. Time flies. But what is the result? I WOULD ONLY USE THE -ING FORM HERE IF YOU ARE ANNOYED BY IT (OR WANT TO SAY THAT JOHN IS ANNOYED BY IT). OR IF YOU SHOW PICTURES OF JOHN IN THE MIDDLE OF THESE ACTIVITIES.
NOTHING, absolutely NOTHING. Now he is totally confused and frustrated. And that SUCKS, that REALLY, REALLY SUCKS.
Now John needs someone to hold his hand and guide him to the right product.
He needs a solution which combines everything in one place: the data, the advice and the store.
He needs TeccBot!
WELL DONE!!!
Medina (Dienstag, 24 März 2020 16:03)
Hi Dagmar,
-Statistics show that 56 percent of the students considered homework as a primary source of stress. (Evidence)
- Can you afford to let them do that at your expense? (Rhetorical question)
Br, Medina
Dagmar for Medina (Donnerstag, 26 März 2020 15:06)
Okay, but you should have put your sentences / language techniques into some kind of perspective (see instructions).
Andreas Beuchler (Donnerstag, 26 März 2020 16:23)
Dear Dagmar!
Here are my sentences:
Evidence:
I read in a newspaper the other day that we are sliding into an economic recession.
Rhetorical question:
According to the latest study, 30% of apple farmers have stopped farming between 2002 and 2017.
Inclusive language:
We have to work together now to make this happen. We all know what that means, don´t we?
Michael Reiterer (Donnerstag, 26 März 2020 21:43)
Hey Dagmar!
Here are my sentences:
- According to the latest study I can tell you that the unnecessary food waste in Austria has an average value of € 300 per house. That would mean that Austria would produce € 1.17 billions of unnecessary food waste in one year. (Evidence)
- We all know what that's means don't we? And that is the reason why we have developed our product to reduce this incredible amount of unnecessary food waste.
All the best,
Michael
Dagmar for Andreas B. (Freitag, 27 März 2020 17:40)
Evidence:
I read in a newspaper the other day that we are sliding into an economic recession.
Rhetorical question:
According to the latest study, 30% of apple farmers (have) => PAST TENSE, NOT PRESENT PERFECT stopped farming between 2002 and 2017.
Inclusive language:
We have to work together now to make this happen. We all know what that means, don´t we?
OKAY, BUT WHERE´S THE LINK TO YOUR PRODUCT?
Dagmar for Michael R. (Freitag, 27 März 2020 17:41)
- According to the latest study I can tell you that the unnecessary food waste in Austria has an average value of € 300 per houseHOLD?. That would mean that Austria would produce=> PRODUCES € 1.17 billions of unnecessary food waste in one year. (Evidence)
- We all know what that's means don't we? And that is the reason why we have developed our product to reduce this incredible amount of unnecessary food waste.
GOOD!